| no, honestly, thank you very much for your critique.
i really have two interests which i have focused on during high school, which is art and social activism. i mean i tried categorizing a bit in the "resume", but I don't think it came across to readers. i'm not applying to princeton because i have achieved a math award, or im in national honors society. not at all, because i know every kid who applies will have those strenghths. its more of just a record of what i have been able to accomplish. in addition to my class rigor and work ethic, more than anything i want my passion in art and social activism to come across. how i've utilized them, and even better how i've utilized them together. could you please give ideas of improving the list? in terms of making it more effective to a reader, and really giving an impression of "who" i am, rather than "what" i am? |