| Just kidding...read through the posts, read your essay.
I'm sorry- but I will have to agree with Annika. Look at this way. I understand your situation and the event itself was huge, a turning point for you for sure. I will not deny the emotional significance of the event. BUT when appyling to colleges, the event doesn't matter. It is the rhetoric- it's how you presented your essay. People have written about rubber balls and chairs and gotton into Harvard while people who have written poignant accounts of helping blind lepers in South America were rejected outright. College adcoms won't know the event- they don't care- it depends on how YOU present it and your essay, frankly, wasn't gripping. The writing was a bit crude( not the sexual aspect, but grammatically). While you may have felt that your candid response would have been your winning point, you did not sell it. It came across as a naive, voyoeristic paragraph that seems wholly immature. At one point, you reflected on how you didn't rape her- while the situation to you is different, on paper, it comes out not just bland and flat but also alarming. I was reading this thinking, would I want a student, who at 13, thinks he was morally right to not **** a girl while she was passed out?
I'm sorry but I can understand why you got rejected. |