Datboyjj

Can a response ever be a bit too strong?
For example:
"During my freshman year and sophomore year, I wasn’t exposed to the competitive debate environment I desired (Tournament of Champions) but after writing the Arendt Case, I realized I had grown from a local debater into an ardent philosopher. "
My mom tells me that the "ardent philosopher" is to strong. Do you guys think it is.

PS-This isnt my entire response

fireandrain

Of course responses can be too strong, but I don't think your example is.

The phrase "ardent philosopher" is both intriguing and puzzling, because I've never thought to use that adjective with that noun. Can a philosopher be ardent? How is a philosopher ardent? And what does philosophy have to do with debate? That comes out of the blue for me. Since I don't know what Tournament of Champions is, that's another puzzle. And I've never heard of the Arendt case, and even after googling it, it didn't ring a bell. And why did you 'write" the Arendt case? Did you read about it? Argue it?

Datboyjj

Lol i titled my case the Arendt case after the philosopher Hannah Arendt. It's sorta a debate thing haha.

VelvetVeins

as a fellow high school debater, I intuitively understand the phrase "ardent philosopher". I'd say go with it, especially if you are going to elaborate on it.