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So, posted below is my completed Personal Statement for UC Prompt #1 which states: Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I didn't work on it too hard, but I'm pretty sure it'll be good enough to get me in to the UC system (AKA my backup schools), plus I need to focus on my Princeton app. I want everyone to go ahead and take a look at it and if you think it needs some work, then, I mean, go ahead and post your two cents, but I think for most people it'll be a good example.
Alright thanks all, and GOOD LUCK! :)
This diverse earth may serve mutually as a home to you, me, and everyone else, but each individual inherits from the world their own piece thereof, upon which stand the beliefs, ideologies, experiences, and emotions that compose the essence of this individual. As constantly morphing bodies impacted by their surroundings, these are the enigmas that influence discovery as well as ignorance, peace as well as war, and success as well as failure. Each one of us is a product as well as a creator of this personal atmosphere. On a personal basis, the iota of the world that I come from is influenced by my family and culture, as well as the teachings and experiences associated with my beliefs and lifestyle.
By definition, my primary set of surroundings is my family, a blessing I am fortunate enough to receive. Our family is composed of an accommodating infrastructure of individuals, each influencing the other. In regards to myself, my household aides me in shaping the views and impressions I have of the world. My father, a seasoned physician and the first of his family to immigrate to America from Egypt, aspires for financial freedom for himself and consequently his family. He hopes to provide a longstanding legacy to benefit the coming generations as a fulfillment to his quest for a purpose in life. It is from my father that I draw my knowledge and understanding of the outside world. My mother, the honored stay-home matron and dependable confidant, establishes daily a gentle atmosphere for my younger sisters and I. Out of humility and forgiveness, she cares for us and wants nothing but the best even when our views conflict. From her wealth of experience, I gather my wisdom and practicality to accompany me in my efforts outside of the home. To my younger sisters, I am a leader and a counsel, an annoyance and a companion, as well as a teacher and a peer. As the first of the family to be educated in the United States, I have given light to their path and opened many opportunities in terms of education and life as a whole. By playing all of these roles in my sisters lives, I was able to develop my social and leadership skills to a high degree at a young age. Moreover, as ultimate descendants of the true Egyptians, not the Arabs mind you, we, as a family, possess a sort of link to this grand ancient civilization of intelligentsia and other elite; it is from this heritage that I derive my extravagant culture and consequently my secondary languages and my religion.
My decisions invariably return to my piece of the world for reference and inspiration. My dreams and aspirations are inarguably based on my familial, cultural, and religious influences present at my essence. I have come to understand that the manifest coalescence of these ideas has not forced me into any one direction, but has opened for me an infinite wealth of opportunity and choice. My experiences have shown me that social morays and tendencies may rise and fall, but passion is always above everything else, whether it is promised riches, fame, or popularity. I plan to follow my passion in studying the complex processes that take place to produce human behavior, cognition, and emotion, because I aspire to understand the human being at its essence and provide a solution to mankinds most threatening issues. Through effort and determination, I believe that I, as a unique individual with a unique piece of the world, will achieve what I was divinely purposed to achieve.