I'll cut right to the chase. Here is my short answer for the common app I am transferring but I live in an area that also has good skiing (if that matters, but I wouldn't have chosen this if I went to college in LA or something). I know there is a little fat to trim. Looking for some suggestions.... any critique appriciated. Thanks!
Edit: Put my entire essay here, and I guess that isn't a good idea... looking for people to send it to. Please help... thanks again.