Well, I'm hoping that it's not too scientific. I just need the reader to recognize, not even understand, just recognize the words voltage, current, and resistance. That's actually the only one, there is other humor in there, but it's easily understandable. My essay is about my summer internship in a science lab, but I was placed in the wrong department, which provides a few good laughs. Essaywise, I think what I want to convey is that I'm smart, but that I also have a real passion for my intended major. My essay is science-related, but also demonstrates how I overcame a prejudice of mine. Hopefully that presents my academic side and my moral side, so I hope that does double-work. I think on my next edit I'll re-read your post and ask myself those questions, because they're really good. Thanks for your help!