Sentimental and Deep vs Lighthearted and Collected
I've been doing a lot of reading on writing the essay and it seemed to me to that you should to steer clear from overly cliche and cheesy essays. So I went with something that matched the straightforward story that doesn't drag on and isn't overly emotional. I had some people read it and they said it didn't convey my personality, which I felt was not true and that I should write about some of my extracurricular or academic challenges.
Thing is I always here that I shouldn't write about stuff thats in other parts of my application. Not trying to sound overly confident, but I have a full application, with no academic stumbles and it is clear looking at my application what I'm passionate about and so I wanted to use my essay to show that I'm not an uptight, hardwired person and that even though I do all these things, I'm still a fairly relaxed fun person.
What should I go with? I feel like doing a cliche sentimental essay would be safe, but at the same time its so monotonous, but I'm afraid of making a big mistake going with a more lighthearted piece.