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College Essay Editing

mblh98mblh98 Registered User Posts: 25 New Member
Okay so I am mid mental break down and I don't know what to do.
I'm applying to the University of Florida and the application is due November 1. I drafted my essay two days ago, and it took me extremely long to write it (6 hours) but when I finished it, I felt like the essay truly conveyed who I was.
My problem is, when I sent the essay to my SAT Tutor/ College advisor, he edited my essay and I felt like while it did sound more formal, he had taken away a lot of my voice.
I do plan on including some parts of what he fixed for me, because it just sounds better, but should i still keep the parts that showed more of my voice?
Should i go for the formal version, or the one that includes more of my voice?

Replies to: College Essay Editing

  • paraguasparaguas Registered User Posts: 73 Junior Member
    well ultimately it is your application, not his. do what you want to do. take his suggestions into consideration but still make your essay sound like yourself.
  • OnMyWay2013OnMyWay2013 Registered User Posts: 1,335 Senior Member
    It's more important that the essay sounds like you than that it's "formal." Depending on your essay topic, formal language might not even be the most appropriate.
  • 1golfer11golfer1 Registered User Posts: 630 Member
    It dependseems -- By more formal, do you mean fixing grammar / sentence structure?
    Feel free to PM me the essays.
  • bjkmombjkmom Registered User Posts: 4,356 Senior Member
    At the end of the day, you should be happy with your essay.
  • jeremyjjeremyj Registered User Posts: 210 Junior Member
    This all depends on how it was edited. If your original essay's "voice" was incoherent or babbling, then I wouldn't go with it. I would, however, also heavily advise against using someone else's words verbatim in an essay that is supposed to reflect your personality. It is dishonest and ultimately will work against you.

    Finding a voice is one of the hardest and most challenging aspects of writing. If possible, open a dialogue with your tutor and ask why he/she made the changes he/she did. Find out how to channel his/her expertise into something that is genuinely yours.
  • mblh98mblh98 Registered User Posts: 25 New Member
    @jeremyj I sent him my essay to read it over and make sure everything was okay, what he fixed was because i was 10 words over the limit so he helped me rephrase some things. I decided not to keep everything he changed because there are some parts that i like better from my essay, but I'm going to keep the parts that he changed that just make it sound better... i don't know if you get what i mean.. lol
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