| rate my dads MIT sdm essay
So my dad is an immigrant Indian guy and he really wanted to get into the MIT sdm program so he can get a managing degree that has some credibility in the U.S. (he has an MBA from a university in pune, but its apparently not enough for his company).
So anyways he is anxious because of his english that he couldn't convey his message to the admissions guy over at MIT well enough so he enlisted my help. Now, I consider myself an ok writer but MIT is a different league entirely and I want to ensure my dad that his essay will be alright
See it doesn't need to be spectacular since he has many other strong points such as having 20+ years of experience in his field (including working side by side with Laxmi Mittal for anyone who knows who that is).
Basically thats the whole story, so anyone want to read it and see if its ok? | 
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