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Old 07-02-2007, 02:55 PM   #1
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*-*!First Essay Ever!*-*
Hey everyone this is my first essay ever, and I, by no means, plan on using it as my final college essay. I just need to know what is wrong with it and how I can improve? Please I'm relying solely on CC to solve this essay problem for me, and I promise if you give me input (I know there's tons of issues) I will read your essay and even though I can't correct it's general look, I can help with spelling, grammar, and writing style.

I would appreciate ALL help in this matter!!!!

thanks
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Old 07-02-2007, 03:01 PM   #2
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send it over, I'll take a look.
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Old 07-02-2007, 03:27 PM   #3
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By being so formal, you distance yourself from the audience. (The start was more appropriate though)
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Old 07-02-2007, 04:08 PM   #4
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send it over to me. yofatcat1@yahoo.com
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Old 07-02-2007, 04:34 PM   #5
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PM me. I'll read it.
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Old 07-05-2007, 10:53 AM   #6
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i'll read it. Im pretty broed, i need somethuing to do
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Old 07-05-2007, 10:20 PM   #7
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Old 07-06-2007, 11:55 PM   #8
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pm ill try my best
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Old 07-07-2007, 01:45 PM   #9
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I can look over it
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