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I posted this on the college admissions section, too.

Is it personal enough for the common app. essay(topic of your choice):

“I got a 100%. I’m number one.” These common statements, joyously stated by my little brother, Justin, come from his hard work and dedication toward school. Ever since he was diagnosed with autism, at the young age of 2, I was concerned about his education. Even though he has autism, he works on his homework for hours to learn the material properly. The hard work and dedication of my brother have inspired me to teach in higher education. I respect my institute of learning and I made it part of my life.
I tutor various students, including my brother, to learn more about the education at its primary form: teaching. For example, I was helping my brother with his addition once. He inquired: “How do I add things up?” I just helped him on his math: “Just carry the one.” My brother said: “Ok. Oh, that’s how I do it.” Then, he simply started zooming through his homework. The plain successes in education have communicated that there is hope in the educational system. Students at my school have also inspired me.
To further learn about education, I stay at my school, Norwalk High, for hours, so I can take advantage of learning opportunities. For instance, I assisted a sophomore with his essay, while I volunteered at my school’s library. He panicked about writing his essay on influential people, so I helped him through his brainstorming and draft process. In the next week, I learned he received a good grade, thus that experience and other experiences like it have validated my belief that there is hope to educate students. Other times after school, I participate in my school’s Site Decision Council.
In my school’s Site Decision Council, I have taken part in the approval of various types of requests, which enhance students’ education, such as new classes. In a meeting around the spring 2007, the council and I approved money for math enrichment classes. One of my school’s math teachers said: “I’ve seen our school’s freshmen improve because of the enrichment class. It motivates students to finish high school.” If students can finish Algebra I, then more students can finish high school to prepare for higher education. I have helped various school officials promote college to students.
I come from a low socioeconomic area, so I have been promoting and driving students to attend college through my school’s college counselor. Whenever I receive materials, such as college fairs, from colleges, such as private colleges, I give the materials to my college counselor. For example, I gave her a postcard that listed various college fairs, such as the first virtual college fair. In turn, students have listened to her various announcements, as shown by their actions: “I went to the college fair. I got a lot of information about the colleges I want to attend.” Assisting students and counselors in my school and my brother have influenced me to educate students.
Collectively, educating students have provided the inspiration for my career choice. Helping my brother with his homework has provided the inspiration for my decision to educate students in institutes of higher education. Furthermore, the actions of students in my school have provided me the knowledge and reasons why I want to pursue my passion to educate. Helping students, through my involvement in school, has provided me the purpose to educate students. Therefore, whenever I see a student studying or a tutor tutoring, I know my choice to pursue teaching in universities is worthwhile.