debater88

On the supplement, it says to be "brief". I know that this means about a page and a half, or 500 words, or whatever, but when I wrote mine I found I had so much to incorporate that my "Why Swarthmore" currently tips the scales at 1,011 words. I want to make it at the very most 700.

What can I cut out without taking away the essential meaning of the piece? Beyond that, can I change anything to make it stronger and more appealing?

As it's so long, I'd prefer it if you'd PM me with your email address. Then I can send it to you as an attachment.

Back to Harvard/Princeton...

ee33ee

UMMMM

Your why swarthmore has a limit of 2000 characters

That's like 300 words

Sorry

debater88

Darn--you're right. Looks like I'll have to re-write the whole thing (or I could totally ignore the 2000 character guideline. My essay uploads just fine).

Really, how can they expect me to tell them, specifically, why I want to attend Swarthmore in what amounts to one, double-spaced page? How can they really know anything about me or my genuine interest from such a short blurb?

Once again, admissions people leave me scratching my head.

bagpiper

I'll look at your essay. Mine's submitted already--it was a little over 500 words, 3/4 of a single-spaced page. I just uploaded, ignoring the 2000 character thing--I think that's the point of having the upload there, it's not a hard limit.

CurrySpice

I'll take a look at it if you'd like... I'm finished with all my essays for Jan 1 (not applying to Swarthmore) and have become an editing/cutting expert!

PM me!

debater88

Gladly, CurrySpice

otaru

I can help you cut down as well... I've become somewhat ruthless with words after editing and re-editing my own essays! haha

CurrySpice

Sent! I hope my comments were helpful. You just need to examine which elements of the college are most appealing to you and keep those. You don't need each aspect ;-). Great essay though!

debater88

I've PM'ed you, otaru. Thanks.