Duke has an optional essay about why I want to attend Duke. Here is the prompt:
(For Arts and Sciences Applicants Only) If you are applying to Trinity College of Arts and Sciences, please discuss why you consider Duke a good match for you. Is there something in particular at Duke that attracts you? Please limit your response to one or two paragraphs.
I wrote a rough draft last night and was wondering if someone could read over it for me. My friend said it sounded too plain, without enough personal connections. She recommended that it would be better not to submit the essay rather than submit an average one. Please give me your opinion too!
Combine school spirit, unparalleled medical facilities, and diverse people, landscape, and architecture. The result: Duke University. What first caught my eye about Duke was Krzyzewskiville. The name in itself astounded me and its origin even more. Every basketball season, hundreds of tents are set up as Duke students gather to support the Cameron Crazies. Only a tight-knit community like Duke could start a tradition of such magnitude.
I was further blown away by the varied atmosphere Duke has to offer. By combining new buildings with old, by joining technology with nature, Dukes diverse campus provides an array of settings varying from the busy Bryan Center to the serene Chapel. Yet all across campus, the feeling of family remains, ensuring that I can call Duke my home and its students my friends.
I also wanted to add something about my interest in Duke's medical programs. Like this:
With top-rated libraries, hospitals, and medical programs, Duke is ideal for me, a student who plans on studying and researching medicine.
except I don't know how to incorporate it into what i've already written. Help! :]