yoman3

Who can revise/read/critique my essay about my interest in movies? I'll post a few paragraphs here:

I woke up to a scene of sheer trepidation. The movie theatre was ablaze, hundreds trapped inside. The piercing screams of the occupants of the theatre was only outmatched by the maniacal laughter I heard in the background.

And there I was, in my room, in front of my computer, “Inglorious Basterds” playing on the glowing screen. The movie theatre still ablaze, the occupants still screaming, the laughter still in the background – it just wasn’t real. It was part of a movie, a movie that rekindled my love for film.

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I’m not that sure why I love all of these aspects of film, but the simplest answer is: it’s fun. Seeing the behind the scenes is entertaining. Watching “good” movies is enthralling. I love looking up so-called “classics” or “masterpieces” and watching them, and then I try to see why they are classics or masterpieces. I like to watch HBO and see for myself why Saving Private Ryan is hailed by critics and why Catwoman is panned. I love watching a movie once for its entertainment value and then watching it again to analyze why it was so good.

pandareta

I just wanted to point out that I don't think "trepidation" is the word you're looking for. It works on a technical level, sort of, but I'm still trying to wrap my head around the concept of SHEER trepidation. You probably also want to shake up your sentence structure for the last few in the last paragraph or make the parallel more intentional-seeming.

I definitely hope that's your real title, though... anyways if you'd like, I guess I could read the whole thing.

yoman3

Hahaha I wish it was my real title, but I don't think colleges would appreciate it. Also thanks, I'll PM you my essay.

yoman3

Anyone else?

yoman3

PLEASE? I'm desperate here.