An0maly

You should have ended it with the lyrics to the theme song of the Fresh Prince of Bel-Air.

mifune

Satire must be cogently persuasive to work. Feigning ignorance is not effective since the satire will not come through to the reader. Read "A Modest Proposal" if you have not already.

Slt10T

They don't want something like this. When someone reads your essay, they should come away with the feeling that they just had a meaningful conversation. This does not feel that way.

seventytwo

I stopped reading after the first sentence. If you're applying to Harvard, you should know how to spell "Massachusetts" and "university."

mifune

^Yep. Or at least don't admit it.