please grade my SAT essay
P.S, english is my second language + this is my first attempt on SAT's essay part :P
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"That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly. It is dearness only which gives everything its value."
Do we value only what we struggle for? Plan your response, and then write an essay to explain your views on this issue. Be sure to support your position with specific points and examples. (You may use personal examples or examples from your reading, observations, or, knowledge of subjects such as history, literature, science.)
It is true that people only value what they struggle for. there are several examples from history and current events that support the aforementioned statement.
Montgomery Bus Boycott,led by Martin Luther King Jr. in 1955, was a successful attempt to end the racial segregation on all montgomery public buses. the boycott lasted 385 days. It was truly a struggle as during this period King's house was bombed and he was arrested too. This event wouldn't have been valued much if it wasn't for the struggles and hardships the King and rest of the black people had to face.
Thomas Edison, the inventor of light bulb, was told in his early years by his teachers that he was "too stupid to learn anything". Work was no better, as he was fired from his first two jobs for not being productive enough. Even as an inventor, Edison made 1,000 unsuccessful attempts at inventing the light bulb. Of course, all those unsuccessful attempts finally resulted in the design that worked. His struggle towards he invention of light bulb is justified by its value
Food, for a millionaire, wouldn't be of much value. As he doesn't have to work hard day and night to earn a living. While on the other hand, a labor for example, would have to exert himself just so that he wouldn't starve. this proves that a person would value something more if he is struggling towards it.
Hence, with all my examples I conclude that we only value things we have struggled for