Essay grading please
First, I would like to start out saying I think typing up the essay without errors defeats the whole purpose of trying to get some honest feedback. I'd like to hear realistic critiques on how I did with regard to the 25 minutes that you would get on the SAT. They're not expecting perfect essays within that time frame, and neither should you. Looking for a fake grade on how I would've done if I had time to redo it..well I don't think that would be very helpful to anyone.
Think carefully about the issue in the following excerpt and the assignment below. We do not take the time to determine right from wrong. Reflecting on the difference between right and wrong is hard work. It is so much easier to follow the crowd, going along with what is popular rather than risking the disapproval of others by voicing an objection of any kind.
Is it always best to determine one's own views of right and wrong, or can we benefit from following the crowd? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue.
While going along with the crowd may be the easiest path in life, that does not necessarily make it the best, especially not when it comes to ethics and morality. In To Kill a Mockingbird, Fahrenheit 451, and even the Salem witch trials in our history, going along with the crowd often means sacrificing one's own beliefs for the sake of evading ostracization. But, as shown with the revolutionary characters and people who try to break society's molds, the only way for things to change is by standing up for what you think is right.
The novel To Kill a Mockingbird is set in a racist, southern town by the name of Maycomb. Atticus Finch, a lawyer, is presented with a case that entails defending the innocence of a black man accused of raping a white woman. Surely his social status would plummet, and there was almost no chance of his winning the case, but that did not stop him. He braced himself and his children for the wrath of the townspeople that would undoubtedly be incurred. It is because of people like him that America today has seen such tremendous changes in racial equality. Had he just followed society's norms, prejudice would never be overcome.
On the subject of literature, Fahrenheit 451's demonstration of rebellion against the crowd is also inspirational. The main character, a "fireman" whose duty was actually burning down the houses of anyone found who read books, began to question the morality of his profession. Rather than sheepishly following the sheltered life of ignorance, he risked his life, his wife, and his job by stealing the books from burning houses. All knowledge might have been lost had he not boldly decided to follow his own views on right and wrong.
Finally, in Salem, Massachusetts, people used to be accused of witchcraft by their neighbors. Though it sounds ridiculous today, many people's lives and beliefs were endangered. They were hung for not admitting their demonic practices and the only way to salvation was admitting said sins and accusing other people involved. However, in doing so, one was sacrificing their own beliefs to save themselves. If people continued to follow the crowd, imagine how many lives would have been wasted. You would have to be careful not to make anyone jealous or otherwise unhappy with you to remain safe, and it would be a free for all when it comes to revenge. It is only as people began to stand up for what was truly right, not merely what was socially acceptable, that life could begin to be just.
In conclusion, people do not benefit from following the crowd. Doing so would not only be foolish, but dangerous. Without people willing to fight for what they think is good, we can never move forward. As seen in Fahrenheit 451, To Kill a Mockingbird, and even our very own American history, only you should be the one who decides your mindset, or society will never progress.