johnnyzxz

"Yet the smile on his face remained unwavering: it was there when he greeted me in, when I would check my cell-phone, and even when he would lose."

not sure if lack of parallelism or not. this is for my college essay btw, not SAT, but figured y'all knew

johnnyzxz

this one too:

"Every day he found time to spend with me, precious time that we passed with a casual board game."

1) should it be precious time "which" we passed (rather than precious time "that" we passed)
2)should there be a comma in the middle, or am i using the wrong punctuation? would anyone care to re-structure this sentence if so?

fogcity

They are both correct as written.