Here is my essay.I tried to use upper level vocabulary and write adequate examples.I am not sure that my concluding paragraph was good ; i was running out of time and couldnt make up sth better Please,give me a grade and tell me how to improve .I promise i will review your essay :}
Prompt ''Can success be disastrous''
Many successful people have disastrous lifes.A successful person is reputed to have great education,remunerative job and perfect life ,in general .However,many successful people skimp on their personal life,caring only about their careers.When they reach a certain age ,they realize that their life is empty ,and besides all the money and glory ,they have nothing.The subsequent examples from history,literature,and science substantiate my thesis and prove that the success can also be disastrous.
In 1559 Elizabeth I became the first queen of England.After her coronation,many people tought that it was absolutely preposterous and ludicrous that a woman was ruling the whole English empery.Non only she improved the life of the peasants in the country ,but she also subjugated many new colonial territories.Her life was definitely very successful ,but also disastrous because she didnt have any progeny to bequeath her empery to.Her rule is known as ''The Golden Age'' ,which proves how successful she was.However,many historians think that her life was very unhappy and can be considered disastrous.
''The artisan'' is one of the most famous novels of the Australian author Gorden Adams.It is about a little boy who dreams to become a carpenter like his father,who thinks that his son has much more potencial and wants him to be a doctor or an engineer.The boy leaves Australia and goes to the USA where he becomes a famous rocket engineer and achieves everything his father dreamed of.In the end of the novel ,the main character regrets that he did not become a carpenter and delineates his whole life as disastrous because he did not achieve his dream.''The Artisan'' teaches us that even the most successful person may have a disastrous life.
The Russian physicist Nikolai Ivanov invented the microwaves in 1895.He spent thirty years before his efforts came to fruition ; he then found out that an Italian engineer had already made the same discovery.Ivanov feelt that his life was completely meaningless .He commited a suicide soon after the Italian engineer won the nobel prize.The Russian also had a very successful life .but it ended disastrously too.
Success does not guarantee a happy life.Sometimes successful people realize that heir life was complete falure ,while poor people think they have achieved everything .In the end,everyone realizes that they can never have everything.