How do you guys suggest going about 'excusing' grades and talking about difficulties in the Essay?
On the personal statement I have already written, I don't outright say "my brother was arrested, dropped out and fought with my parents until 3 in the morning so that's why my grades are bad". I kind of dance around it but never mentioning my grades? Bad thing or good thing? I have gotten a couple people suggesting I do jsut that and be straight forward about it. So what do you guys think?
I am going to apply through EOP, and on the UCSB site for EOP it says: Be sure to mention if you are the first in your family to pursue higher education, if your parents received educational degrees outside the U.S., or if you speak a language other than English in your home. .
And what do you guys think about this? While every single one of those things do apply to me (low income, first gen, first language not Eng etc) I don't talk about them in the essay? And I figure the income and parent education thing is on the app itself. Since I'm applying through EOP do you think I should do all this since this is what they want.
And lastly, does anyone want to read my essay and tell me if they think it's ok and apparent enough without me frankly listing everything that would qualify me for EOP? I realize that this is in the wrong section, but it really only applies to the UCs.
EDIT: Oh and in case anyone does volunteer to read the say, it's 900 words long, I plan to cut it to be about 700. This address' the first prompt. And I know beggers can't be choosers, but I'd rather readers who have more than 150 posts since in the past I've gotten a lot of unreturned replies (as in I sent it to them but never got a reply). So I'm a little gun shy, since it feel like they just stole my essay. And no 08ers for obvious reasons.