Please help criticize and edit my personal essay:
You will be asked to submit one personal essay. The personal essay will allow the admissions staff to get to know who you are as a student. Your essay should be limited to approximately 2500 characters, including spaces.
2016-2017 Essay Topics
Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.
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