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Offensive essay?


Replies to: Offensive essay?

  • akashbansalakashbansal Registered User Posts: 1,539 Senior Member
    Your essay is very good.
  • voronwevoronwe Registered User Posts: 447 Member
    I'd lose the "only at Penn," since the same thing happens at Yale, Wesleyan, and about 80 gazillion other places.

    Also, if this is the entire essay, I would still have NO IDEA why you wanted to go to Penn.

    So I assume a third paragraph is on the way?

    (Note: I was an Ivy interviewer for many years, and I'd be scratching my head over why this was answer to "Why this school?")
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