Need advice for an SAP appeal
Crossposting from the cafe forum because I've seen these types of things posted both here and there.
I'm sure you've all seen this a thousand times, but I need some pointers on my SAP appeal.
I went back to school in 2012-2014 at this school and ended up dropping classes over and over. After realizing I had no idea what I was doing I eventually dropped out of classes.
Here we are 4 years later and I've decided to attempt going back, Here's a draft of my letter with sensitive bits removed:
To The Financial Aid Office of <school>:
My Name is <name>. I write to your office today regarding the probation status of my financial aid. I attended your fine institution way back in the year of 2012 through the year of 2014, shortly after graduating high school. I began attending <school> because college was simply what one did after high school. Most of the people I had graduated with were going, and it made me feel like a failure to not do so as well. That’s not to pass the blame along to peer pressure or anything else, the blame for my poor performance lies squarely on my own shoulders. In my time at <school> I foolishly refused to heed the warnings of not starting school until I was sure of my course of study. I rejected help in the form of tutoring and counseling because of my arrogance and pride. I refused to make a class schedule and plan. I dropped classes at the first sign of inconvenience. I was floundering about when I should have been choosing a course of study and sticking to it. I had just gotten my first job before I started and had no idea how to balance work and school life and refused any help in doing so. I was a fool. This escalated to my final semester in Spring of 2014. After failing to meet my credit requirements, being placed on probation, and still having no idea what to choose for a course of study I made the decision to stop attending <school> and focus on bettering myself before returning to school.
Flashing forward 4 years, I finally feel myself ready to return to school. I was ecstatic when I was readmitted to <school>. I look back on my failure to utilize the school’s resources to seek tutoring or gain advice from student services as one of my most embarrassing moments. In the years between then and now, I’ve learned the arrogance of my past actions. I simply was not ready for college, and I fully own up to that fact. I’ve talked with several people who have gotten their Associates Degree to help me understand what I’m getting into. I’ve completed planning in my degree audit and intend to stick to it religiously. I intend to make full use of the resources at my fingertips in the form of tutors, counseling, and any form of planning that <school> makes available to me. I will dedicate myself to my school work and there will not be a single dropped class from this point on. School must come first. My personal life has reached a point of security that I will not feel the pressure of work and school life balance I did before and can focus on my studies. I’ve decided on a course of study and fully intend to stick with it. I want to become a teacher. I realize now that it’s all I’ve ever wanted from my life. It’s a goal I cannot accomplish without the reinstatement of my financial aid, and I implore you to consider my request for an appeal.
Thank you for your consideration and time, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Any pointers? AM I too wordy? not specific enough in what I Intend to do better? Is it just plain bad?
Any help would be appreciated guys, thanks.