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"Why NYU" essay help?

RougarouRougarou Registered User Posts: 76 Junior Member
edited July 2015 in New York University
I know that the Common App doesn't open for Fall 2016 applications until August 1, but I'm moving in September and want to finish up my ED application for NYU Tisch before that happens, just in case things get hectic. I'm writing my supplement on Word and transferring it over when the Common App opens. This is what I have so far:

Prompt: What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU?

"NYU offers a BFA in my major: Dramatic Writing. [balance redacted]"

I was originally under the impression that the essay was to be fewer than 250 words, which is why it feels so condensed. I'm working on expanding the second paragraph. Also, I know that I've only answered half of the prompt so far, but I'm struggling to answer "what can you offer us" without sounding really full of myself. Suggestions?

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-skieurope
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Replies to: "Why NYU" essay help?

  • KKmamaKKmama Registered User Posts: 3,044 Senior Member
    We do not know you so we cannot guess what type of contribution you can make. The school wants to get to know you. What unique perspective or talent can you offer? You can state fact without being "full of yourself".
  • happy1happy1 Forum Champion Parents, Forum Champion Admissions Posts: 23,962 Forum Champion
    edited July 2015
    Nobody can answer this for you. You just need to express your unique point of view.
  • RougarouRougarou Registered User Posts: 76 Junior Member
    My bad, I worded my original post poorly. I'm looking for edits on what I've written so far. I completely understand that I have to come up with the rest of the essay on my own.
  • CDOESenior2k16CDOESenior2k16 Registered User Posts: 315 Member
    FYI you should never post one of your essays online!!! First of all, this essay is now 100% public to anyone, so it could easily be stolen. Second, I've heard that some schools have online programs to check if an essay is plagiarized. So if you submitted your essay they could easily find this copy online that you just posted and assume that you completely copied it. I'm pretty sure that would result in being taken out of the applicant pool. I would contact one of the site moderators to delete this post... I know that in the college essay forum there's a warning that says if you want essay readers you should only PM your essay to trusted CC members. Once again, you should ask one of the moderators to delete your post
  • RougarouRougarou Registered User Posts: 76 Junior Member
    Yikes, didn't even think of that! Any idea where I can find out who moderates the forums?
  • CDOESenior2k16CDOESenior2k16 Registered User Posts: 315 Member
    I think @skieurope ?? not sure if I spelled his/her username right but I know it's something with skieurope in it
  • DHMIS1DHMIS1 Registered User Posts: 12 New Member
    Hey @Rougarou I was accepted to NYU and am going to go there this fall. I remember writing this essay very well - At first I was stumped then everything started to click together. This was my favorite essay i wrote of all the supplemental essays i had.

    If you want me to read your essay i would be more than happy to do so! Hopefully ill see you at NYU in the fall of 2016! You can pm me
  • AhlesaadatAhlesaadat Registered User Posts: 54 Junior Member
    @DHMIS1 Hi. I am also applying to NYU (The campus in Abu Dhabi). Can I send you my essay and you could give it a view? Thanks
  • michasousamichasousa Registered User Posts: 1 New Member
    Hellooooo NYU has been my dream school since I was born if i'm being completely honest... and i have no clue what to write :~( pls pls pls help!!
  • seeniebeenieseeniebeenie Registered User Posts: 250 Junior Member
    For my "Why NYU" essay, I split it into two paragraphs. The first dealt with why I specifically wanted to go to NYU and why I felt it was a good choice for me, while the second paragraph consisted of me explaining what I have to offer to NYU, as the prompt asks.

    My advice would be to be honest. Don't try to suck up to the admissions committee and say "Oh, NYU is such an amazing school!!!"; instead, talk about what makes it amazing in your eyes. For me, that was the chance to explore the city and get to know my roots again while getting an amazing education.

    For the "what can you offer NYU" portion, also be honest. Be humble. If you haven't done anything awe-inspiring yet, come clean and say that. NYU isn't just looking for amazing students, they're looking for amazing people with amazing potential.

    If anyone needs help or has any questions about NYU, feel free to message me.
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