My senior in AZ who has wonderful grades and did very well on his SAT is struggling with the common app essay. He does not seem to be able to write with passion about himself. So, he wrote about an experience he had with a trip to Boston where he visited college campuses and how it inspired a him to reach for his fullest potential. This would fall under the #5 question - Discuss an event that sparked a period of personal growth..
We thought it was okay, but he could do better. So he wrote another essay about his experience at Maine teen camp where he was stripped of electronics, had team building events, met kids from around the world, learned to trust others and was beginning to discover his purpose in life. This essay was worse in my opinion and felt forced and sounded mechanical in nature.
Last night he wrote an expository essay for an English assignment and writes about his trip to NY. It is full of life and vivid descriptions. I think it's so much better than the other two, but it does not say much about who he is and his aspirations, but it shows the world through his eyes. In his closing sentence he says the trip gave him a new sense of understanding and respect for a different way of life. I suppose this essay could fall under prompt #7 - share an essay on any topic of your choice.
Do we go with the Boston essay where he was inspired by people to take more risks in life to reach his fullest potential or the NY essay which is a wonderfully written essay, but says less about him?
Appreciate your input. Thanks!