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See the Essay That Helped This Student Get into Stanford

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Check out the Common App essay of this student, who was accepted at Stanford University. https://insights.collegeconfidential.com/stanford-essays-that-worked
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  • cptofthehousecptofthehouse 30771 replies59 threads Senior Member
    I don’t believe it’s the quality of this essay but the fact that it shows the writer to be severely challenged in family life and environment that got her in.
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  • austinmshauriaustinmshauri 10199 replies393 threads Senior Member
    I liked the writing and I loved the attitude of this young woman, but the essay content matters. Her parents were a 17 year old high school drop out and her 27 year old boyfriend. The dad left them and the mom became a drug user/seller. Yet this young woman apparently did well enough academically, in spite of her background, to be eligible for admission to Stanford. I think that's what got her in, not the essay.
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  • vhsdadvhsdad 257 replies0 threads Junior Member
    I've learned to take so called "essays that worked" with a grain of salt. Like that Costco essay that got supposedly got a young lady into a bunch of Ivy's, and it turned out she also had a hook.
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  • rickle1rickle1 2775 replies23 threads Senior Member
    From a style standpoint, I do like the rhythm. "Don't do x they told her...she didn't listen...they were right..." Keeps a nice beat, makes it easy to read, and had this reader wanting to see where the train was headed.
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  • lookingforwardlookingforward 35854 replies404 threads Senior Member
    It's all tell, no "show." And if I had a dollar for every kid who thinks they wrote a great book.... She appears to be saying she prefers her own company and books? The rest of her app/supp must have overcome this.

    Nicely written, sure. Helped her get the admit? Don't think anyone can say that without seeing the rest.

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  • gardenstategalgardenstategal 6872 replies10 threads Senior Member
    Sure, you would have to see the rest of the application and see how this fit into the whole. But I liked it. It had a rhythm that pulled you in and gave you context for this student. She explained not only where inspiration came from but that she was imagining a life other than the one she has. If I were an AO, after reading this essay, I would feel like I had a little more insight into this student beyond what everything that is simply listed on the app.
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