an introduction for capital punishment

mehdii1
Tue, 23 Jul 2013 14:26:06 +0000

hi.i have written an introduction for capital punishment and I am willing to know my mistakes.

Should we put capital punishment to death? in modern and civilized societies,supporters of capital punishment has decreased in number considerably and critics considers it inhumane and barbaric but I believe this attitude is unrealistic and romantic and ignores basic human nature and it is harmful to the society.This essay will discuss the issue in details.

please be honest and helpful.what do you think of my first sentence?do you find my essay misleading or ambiguous?
I m learning how to write an essay and my teacher wanted me to focus on introduction part.when I showed my paper to her,she thought that my first sentence was misleading and not clear enough and she said if I m going to to start my essay like that,i need to explain it and make it clear in my subsequent sentences but I think that my first sentence is clear enough and my subsequent sentences makes it crystal clear and reader isnot dumb.
that s why I asked you whether my first sentence and its figurative meaning is clear to you or not and was it a good decision to start my essay like that