an introduction for capital punishment

halcyonheather
Tue, 23 Jul 2013 15:21:08 +0000

I know my first sentence isnot original but I asked if you find it ambiguous and misleading or not.



I interpreted it as “Should we stop having capital punishment?” If that’s what you mean, I don’t think it’s ambiguous.



did it flow nicely or you found my introduction a mess?did I succeed to get you motivated and curious to read what I m going to write after my introduction?



I think you could have been more specific about what you meant by “harms society” and “human nature.” How would banning capital punishment ignore human nature? You shouldn’t just repeat what you’re going to say in the rest of the essay (if you do that, the reader won’t have a reason to keep reading because they’ll already know what you’re going to say), but you could be a little less vague.