best essay strat?

mrcapslock
Tue, 01 Aug 2006 14:51:51 +0000

Heres my essay for online course 1. I know its bad, but give me suggestions as well as how you would grade this essay.

Prompt

We often hear that we can learn much about someone or something just by casual observation. We are not required to look beneath the surface or to question how something seems. In fact, we are urged to trust our impressions, often our first impressions, of how a person or a situation seems to be. Yet appearances can be misleading. What “seems” isn’t always what is.

Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

My Essay

Appearance or impression can be both a guiding factor or a misleading first-sight. Mankind has been blessed with the monders of eyesights, interpretting ninety percent of the information we perceive into fact. Yet interpretation is simply interpretation. Only by analyzing this interpretation can a person truly understand the mere perplexity of the deeper end. Judging superficial will only produce a superficial analyzes. Never will appearance truly denote what it will be and will often times be misleading.
As a student, I was taught never to judge a book by its cover. This is very true in situations or people. An example of this would be my past experiences with friends. Many of them appear extremely friendly, but when “tue” trouble arises, they tend to not help me.
History has also given its bits of surprises. In World War II, the USA “seemed” neutral and without too much extrusion in the war. Yet with its shell of neutrality sat diplomatic plans and the atomic bomb. This bomb reviewed many of the true intent of USA’s involvement in the war.
Often times, misjudgement occurs because the “judged” had purposefully hid his true self. Would a person who wants to be your friend tell you he is actually a greedy, psychotic person? Would a wanted criminal walk around looking like a criminal or would he dress himself like a gentleman? This poses the idea that people tend to judge and others make themselves appear like something they aren’t. With 2 sides to this chain, a misleading observation is bound to happen.
Not only is impressions misleading, they can mess with your perception of reality. Only by careful and deeper analyzes will actualality review itself.

more strat or essay critique would be much appreciated.