can some one look at my college essay? pleaseee!!

keffysp
Thu, 28 Nov 2013 19:30:07 +0000

I agree with Shirleyxxy.
Your topics are too broad and are jumbled all over the place. Find one focus and progress from that. Try to use that one focus to answer the question; don’t use the question to direct your essay.

I’m writing my essays as well! Hope all goes well. Good luck!