Can someone please grade my essay and give me a few pointers?

chewydog
Thu, 02 Oct 2014 08:21:01 +0000

Cut it out completely whenever possible. Otherwise, be as specific as possible–what about the example and what exactly does this component support?

For instance (note that I’m just cutting out the I/me/my stuff in examples due to sets I must deal with):

…“a renowned politician, buttresses the importance of honesty/whatever in individuals.”
…“trying to keep things private just halts this process, hindering further interaction and endangering the human survival.”