Can someone please please please grade my SAT essay! :'( urgent

thatstypical
Sun, 12 Jan 2014 11:58:14 +0000

5/6. This is a nice essay, just a little too wordy. It sounds a little “posh and elevated” and, like you obviously heard before, you should try being more direct instead of sounding “fancy” so to say. I had to read your introduction twice just to figure out your point. If I am comprehending it correctly, you are essentially saying:

“People lessen the value of accurately portraying the world. However, one should not believe the misconception that “realism” must always be presented in books. Positive ideals should be illustrated in books to give the reader a sense of a “better world” and engender creativity as well. Throughout history, it is evident that positive ideals demonstrated in books prove to be beneficial to society.”

Do you see the difference? Be more concise and more simple. It will really help your writing.

Also, there are a few minor grammatical errors (such as subject/verb agreement) - be wary of this on the actual test.

I hope you take my criticisms receptively because it is, otherwise, a great essay with elaborate supporting examples.