Can you grade my SAT essay?

Smoothie
Mon, 25 Apr 2011 10:23:29 +0000

There’s some punctuation and grammar mistakes in the intro and conclusion.
The second example is rather weak, I don’t see the “forced into action”
Perhaps a bit more syntax variation - most sentences start with “He”.

I’d give this a 4-5, and I think you would benefit from a few minutes at the end checking everything over.

thanks for looking mine over!
(it was somewhat offtopic, I agree - I was reciting from an article I read xD)