Check my half-done UC prompt! :D

WingedYoshi
Tue, 23 Nov 2010 03:37:33 +0000

your opening sounded very generic and weak. then you started to describe your major, which doesn’t do anything to help you.

your second half is better because you are describing an experience.

Overall, you have lots of mistakes and you lag in sentence structure. Your flow is bad. And your use of diction is poor.

and yea, it may not be smart to post your statements for everyone to see.