Could anyone please grade my essay :)

music1990
Fri, 29 May 2015 19:37:54 +0000

Yes, you would want to say more about how and why knowledge has made them happier. For example, Braille’s invention has allowed her and other blind people to communicate with the world in a way they never could before. That would probably be a liberating experience for someone who hasn’t been able to read. In this case, knowledge provided a way of connecting people with the outside world, who before may have felt isolated.

You could probably use hypothetical examples that you create yourself as well.

You should also search for SAT writing tips online, as I’m sure there are guides to what exactly they are looking for on these essays. I never took the SAT, so I’m not quite sure how they are graded. Hopefully someone else will reply that knows more about SAT in particular. There is an SAT sub-forum that would be a more helpful place to post this: http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-act-tests-test-preparation/

I would explain more about past tense, but I’m not sure how much grammar matters on these tests, and I don’t want to confuse you more if it’s unnecessary. Generally though, when you’re talking about historical facts, you would say, “Tesla went to university” rather than “Tesla goes to university,” because these things happened in the past, not the present.