Could anyone please grade my essay :)

yanacute
Fri, 29 May 2015 13:39:57 +0000

Ohh thanks @music1990. Yeap this just a practice. Its means that I actually have to tell more about how knowledge makes Tesla and Braille more happier right? I know its a bad essay, thanks for your comment, it makes me clearer now, I kinda get nervous when answering as I have to think of the evidences and write them in 25 minutes. I have a question, do we need to include reason like, why do I say knowledge makes one more happier in my essay? Or I just have to say that I’m agree or don’t with the statement and just proceed with my evidence? And btw, I would need your examples too Thanks for helping!