Could anyone please grade my essay :)

yanacute
Fri, 29 May 2015 12:09:55 +0000

What is your believe on the notion that more knowledge makes one happier?

    Knowledge is crucial. Without knowledge, people are nothing; like a tree without its fruits. There would be no cars, no concrete buildings and no glasses that ease life. Earthlings need knowledge to expand their view on something. Although some claim 'Ignorance is bliss', I believe that knowledge can make one happy because one could enlarge one's imagination with the help of knowledge.

   Nikola Tesla is one of the best inventor of all time or he used to be called as 'The Genius who Lit the World'. Radio, X-ray and hydro power are few of Tesla's inventions. Tesla loves seeing his mother inventing small electrical household during her spare time and someday he would build one of his own. He goes to university to learn more about electrical power. With his knowledge, he has come to an idea of an alternate current. He starts to imagine a world with his invention, the alternate current. Then, he goes to the city to find Thomas Edison, the one who created direct current. Everyone has been using direct current at that time and Tesla said to Edison that he could invent something more useful to step up power easily which is the alternate current. Tesla creates an induction motor from all the knowledge that he got and he succeeded. He opens a lighting shop and his alternate current has first been used for hydroelectric power in Niagara Falls. He feels contented with his knowledge that leads him to invent something by himself.

 Furthermore, Louis Braille is also an example of a person who values knowledge. Braille is blind since she was three because she plays with his father sharp tools. Being a blind person, Braille misses his study. At that time, there is no machine to help the blind to study. However, as she is a brilliant child, she gets to enroll in a university for a blind youth. With her knowledge she builds a Braille machine to help the blind to read. She feels very happy with her knowledge that has helped to expand her knowledge to build a useful machine for the blinds. For her, knowledge is precious.

    Therefore, knowledge is invaluable. Knowledge does make one happy as it could enlarge one's imagination such as it does to Nikola Tesla and Louis Braille.

*its my first time taking SAT, I know this essay is pretty bad. I appreciate all of your comments