Could someone score/comment on my practice SAT essay?

Woandering
Mon, 19 Jan 2015 03:45:34 +0000

Organization: 5 Good job with the transitions. For a 6, you’d need 5 paragraphs.
Thesis:4. You need to make it clearer and more direct. For a 6, you also need to state a reason for your statement.
Supporting Details: 5. Very well written. To strengthen your argument, you’ll need to directly tie the example back to the thesis at the end of each body paragraph. Repeat words or near synonyms such as “self interest.” This draws the reader’s mind back to the thesis. You did this well for the first example, but not so much for the second.
Grammar: 5
Diction: 6

Overall a 10/12.