Critique my essay

mit_hopefulgirl
Fri, 29 Oct 2004 06:53:36 +0000

nice essay! and really unique too! I thought my own essay sounded like crap after reading yours, which had such a major and profound event!

I suppose you could further shorten it by taking out the following part, since it’s more or less a repetition of the few sentences clustered in the conclusion:

"Somehow, when one knows 600+ digits of a number, one tends to lose interest in pursuing the number further. Simply put, "

and perhaps replace the “simply put” with “eventually”? What do you think?

but otherwise, i think the writing’s perfect=)