Critiques for my essay?

dchow08
Sat, 24 May 2008 00:39:55 +0000

Thoughts:

Why does your thesis mention heros when the question asks about ordinary people?

Okay, so Yoav comes up with a plan. But what does that have to do with the original question, which asks whether people learn who they are only when they are forced into action?

“The second occurence of unknown heroism…” But the question isn’t asking about unknown heroism. It’s as if you’re writing an essay for a different prompt.

Same thing. Summary: main character is secluded and finds a way to love the husband. So what? Please, answer the prompt!

Same thing. Why are you always talking about heros when the question asks about people?

Notice, I don’t care about whether what you’re saying is entirely factual or not. The serious error is that you aren’t answering the question.

If I were faced with this question, I’d say, Yes, because you’d have to be forced into some kind of action and see how you respond in order to know how you really are. And then come up with some examples to support that.