Do I sound like I'm making excuses? Additional comments in UC App?

littlecorvidae
Thu, 06 Dec 2018 04:50:48 +0000

I submitted my application already and was just recently thinking about if I wrote the right thing in there.

I wrote about my grades were mostly As and Bs is because two loved ones on my mother’s side passed away within the two year time frame in my hs years and the whole family is trying to hold up my mother’s and our emotional stability. And i also wrote about how I was very close to one of the diseased loved ones and became depressed, yet still have to take care of my sister, mom and EC activities so getting straight As was quite of a problem.

(sorry for dumping personal stuff on here)

I know there I can’t change it any more but I do know I can send an update via email to clarify stuff.

So I want to know if I wrote it right? If I didn’t, will it affect my admission decision? Or does it just make me look like a whiny and weak person bc (maybe) the situation is not as severe as they believe? Do i sound like I’m making stupid excuses?