Essay help for UCs (short one)

avoidingwork
Tue, 09 Nov 2004 02:17:32 +0000

Bri,

I think you have a good topic, but offer the following feedback:

1. The toast reference is odd and a bit confusing. I suggest losing the first sentence

2. is there a specific case article or layout you worked on that you can share about?

3. when you first reference the Titan Template, indicate that it is the school newspaper

4. I like the bit about highlighting student concerns and accomplishments. Again, maybe mention some specific cases.

5. Also lose the sentence about the computer monitor. The overall effect of your essay should convey that you like working on the newspaper, you don’t need to keep stating it.

good luck