essay prompt advice

BevoUT
Thu, 17 Sep 2009 20:26:18 +0000

I wrote my supplemental essay on the games prompt, and I’ve been getting feedback from some friends. The first 3 or 4 said it was amazing, and then some people told me to show and not tell. At first I thought they were right and I was going to revamp the essay quite a bit, but then I read the prompt again and I feel really sure (in my opinion at least) that they want me to dig deep I guess into games, and my essay was a tad formal (stylistically no though). Should I put more emphasis on my anecdotal stuff (include dialogue and crap?)