Essays I was wondering if people would proofread

Applying to College
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these are all essays I feel that i think are in need of proofreading. i put these essays up in a plea that people can help me see my mistakes. i understand there are many people out there but if you would, please do not break that honor infraction and copy my essays. i’ve worked so hard on them and i hope you woudl respect that. and without further adieu

these are the problems i’m having. all my essays are too long and peppered with grammatical errors. please help me find parts that are incoherant and uncessary

my common app essay
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another really hard essay to yale, harvard, and johns hopkins
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johns hopkisn essay
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upenn essay
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<p>crap i want to make it private now beut i cant edit my posts… i was wondering why i cant edit my previoust post anymore… and if any mods could delete this post</p>

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<p>yeah whatever crap i f’ed up, i really hope no one steals it, i cant even edit my darn post after 20 minutes whats up with that?, but if anyone would proofread it now, now would be an awesome time. i’ll just delete the threads later</p>

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<p>I read your first essay. It brought tears to my eyes. Just take out the first 2 paragraphs. They are unnecessary. You don’t need to refer to Camus to get your ideas across. Your prose does a very nice job.</p>