Extremely Low Writing Scores: Essay Critique Required

history1000
Mon, 07 Dec 2015 22:54:34 +0000

Good Things:

1. Specific facts that help to prove your opinion.

2. Being very direct and to the point.
Your evidence was great, but I would recommend applying it to a broader context. Having a three point thesis would also be helpful to you because it could help you to expand more upon the topic and to emphasize your point. Finally, I would recommend that you stay a little more on topic. Your writing was good and so were your facts, you obviously have had a decent amount of experience with writing in the past and I think with a little bit of topic expansion you would be able to do great. Goad luck!