Final sentence. Revision?

dblazer
Sat, 31 Dec 2011 15:47:06 +0000

The sentence doesn’t really make sense…you want to go the the College of Engineering so you can demonstrate your enthusiasm about an intellectually challenging environment?

How about something like:
The College of Engineering of engineering provides the intellectual challenge I enthusiastically seek as I continue you my education.

Make it stronger if it’s one of your top choices.