Grad Admissions essay help

tmhyd720
Wed, 16 Feb 2011 16:31:49 +0000

Ok since no one has given any input yet i’ll throw out some specific questions.

On the personal history statement (not the essay in the seed post):
Is addressing the prompt directly and completely more important than giving a brief to the point response on one aspect of the prompt. My instinct is that with an utter lack of “diversity” in the context of this essay prompt I should probably keep it on the short side.

On the essay above:
If the information specific enough?

Does the wording seem whimsical or just too broad? I have a tendency to fluff when I cant figure out a good transition.

How is the structure of the essay? Is it clear how information is organized?

Is this essay ready to be submitted?