Grad Admissions essay help

Orion8
Wed, 16 Feb 2011 23:58:43 +0000

Okay, here are my two cents. Granted, I glanced over the essay. Sorry, but it’s long and has lots of words. haha.

For the personal history statement, you should answer the prompt directly and use most, if not all of the word count.

The information was specific to me. Only you can deem whether or not it’s specific enough.

The wording sounds fine to me.

I would recommend using the prompt as the method for which you organize your essay. I didn’t check if you did that because frankly, I don’t feel like it.

I would add a little more substance to your research at TERC at how it applies to what you want to study while in graduate school. From what I can glean, you emphasize that you want to work at Lake Tahoe. Does UC Davis do that? What if there’s no faculty that study the project you’re currently working on? I’d recommend a backup plan or something more related to a specific aspect of hydrologic science versus a specific location you want to study.

The last paragraph you can either cut entirely or trim the extrinsic parts/fluff.

Hope that helped.