grade my ACT essay please!

otwist
Thu, 01 Aug 2013 19:43:52 +0000

Prompt:
Some high schools in the US have considered creating separate classrooms for male and female students in subjects such as mathematics and science. Some educators think separate classes will be beneficial because students will be less distracted from learning. Other educators think having separate classes for females and males will not be beneficial because it seems to support false stereotypes about differences in ability between males and females. In your opinion, should high schools create separate classes for male and female students?

My essay:
Is there a clear difference between the ways that males and females learn in school? Some high schools in the United States believe so, so much, in fact, that they have considered creating separate classrooms for male and female students in certain subjects in order for them to learn in a less distracting and more homogeneous environment. However, creating gender-separated classrooms would stunt the development of students’ social skills and feed into the belief that all students of the same gender think and learn alike. Instead, to improve the productivity of students in the classroom, educators should separate them into classes by their preferred methods of learning. Additionally, many single-gender private schools are available for students who prefer learning in such an environment.

High school is not only important in educating students but it is also crucial to the development of students’ social skills. Both males and females will always coexist in society, so male and female students should learn how to interact with each other in school. High school will help students learn to behave maturely & even professionally around members of the opposite gender.

Yet, some educators are concerned that learning in an environment with both genders is distracting to students. This is primarily due to the students’ uncontrollable, hormone-driven thoughts. However, educators should keep in mind that not all people are heterosexual, so creating single-gendered classrooms would not completely eliminate the presence of sexuality-driven distractions during class.

Similarly, having single-gendered classroom environments suggests that educators who approve of these environments assume that all members of the same gender think and learn alike. THis is a huge generalization, therefore, students should be divided into classes by their learning speeds or most beneficial methods of learning instead of by gender.

Luckily for stubborn students or parents of students who desire single-sex classroom environments, there exist numerous private schools in the US that admit only students of a certain gender. Because these alternative school settings exist, there is no reason to separate the students of co-ed schools.

(This is where I ran out of time but I kept writing until I felt I was finished with my essay.)

Although it may seem reasonable to some educators to divide male and female students into different classrooms, the idea could actually prevent students from developing social skills necessary for life outside the classroom. Moreover, the separation would support the assumption that all males or all females are the same in the way they learn or even in their sexual preferences. To increase productivity in the classrooms, students should be sorted out by their preferred methods of learning or their learning speeds rather than by their genders. Even for students who prefer a single-gender classroom environment, there are alternative private schools that will suit their needs.

The overall length was 2 and 2/3rds pages. Do the graders care about flaws in your solution or do they just care how well you describe it?
Also, it would be helpful if you could give me a grade with and without the conclusion so I can see if it made a difference to keep writing after the time was over.
Sorry in advance for the hasty finish and awkward wording!