Grade my essay! :D

sadman51
Mon, 24 Sep 2012 08:55:32 +0000

Well, this is what I think. You have provided two very good examples why do you think the majority is not always correct. But I would like to question the third. You have explained why the majority of the people choose the government they like, but you haven’t explained why would this not be a poor guide. Did you get what I mean? perhaps could could have further said, for an immediate development of the country, the democratic election can be beneficial, since we can assume the majority wants “good” for the country. you can provide a stronger plausible reason than mine.
I guess you will be a given an average of 3 to 4…you do seem to have a potential of scoring a 5 though!!!
For higher scores you need to write longer essays. For example, you can add: Copernicus was “right” in saying that the earth revolved around the sun while other were wrong. The majority had a perspective which was decisive and hence were poorly guided into believing that the Sun revolved around the Sun.
And probably its best to avoid extreme words like “bound to believe”
The Nelson Mandela example is really good.