Grade my Essay please? Thanks!

jkjeremy
Sun, 12 Jan 2014 23:53:21 +0000

The writing here is college-level, so the essay is at least a four.

However, your examples feel forced. They aren’t well-suited for this kind of topic.

If you feel absolutely compelled to use “lit/history/news” examples, you need to do a better job of connecting them to the task.

How these situations are unfair (as opposed to any number of other adjectives that might describe them)?

By what means do these people accept their situations?

In what ways do they “make the best of it,” and what does this show us about them?

You asked for me to identify flaws—so I’ll go a little farther…

I see quite a few clich