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The are some areas in your revised version which need attention.

For example: The second & third sentences of paragraph three reveal that you have not grasped an important point in Schiffman’s position. Schiffman cautions that the demands fueled by corporate greed which require ever increasing productivity and profits is unsustainable, therefore the negative effects on the lives of workers’ lives and health is not worthwhile even though it can be justified by increased productivity and profits.

Schiffman then cleverly points out that a reduction in work hours will result in higher employment rates and that higher rates of employment lead to a healthier economy due to stability and sustainability.