Grade my Essay? :)

jkjeremy
Fri, 09 Aug 2013 09:59:34 +0000

Too many times, you find complicated words and phrases to use in place of relatively simple ideas. This essay tries too hard.

Here are some phrases that are very awkward:

all diligence paid-off
the romantic critics
paid-off in the process is unpragmatic
The struggle is always more improvedent
discovering a novel hypothesis
more precious than the success
struggle is more vital
execute a company

I know why you’re doing this, but it doesn’t achieve its desired purpose.