Grade my essays?

cellardoor17
Thu, 26 Jan 2012 13:57:19 +0000

Thank you so much for replying! Your suggestions were really helpful. I tried to implement them in this next one. (Though hindsight this one is still pretty repetitive; I can’t seem to find other words to describe what I’m saying in the span of 25 minutes.)



Many people believe that our government should do more to solve our problems. After all, how can one individual create more jobs or make roads safer or improve our schools or help to provide any of the other benefits that we have come to enjoy? And yet expecting that the government — rather than individuals — should always come up with the solutions to society’s ills may have made us less self-reliant, undermining our independence and self-sufficiency.

**Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general? **

Other people cannot solve our problems. People must deal with the problems that affect them and their community or country because an individual taking a stand will always have a powerful effect. This is visible in history and in literature.

Martin Luther was one man who completely changed his community. The Catholic church at that time was involved in corrupt practices like the sale of indulgences and refused to change. When Martin Luther told the Catholic Church the problem, they were unwilling to change, so he took the matter into his own hands. By taking responsibility for the problem in his community, Luther had a huge impact. His 95 Theses were circulated all around Germany and his ideas were so powerful they began a new church. He did not wait around for other people to fix his society’s problems; he fixed them himself. The power of his actions have left a mark even today.

Skeeter in The Help by Kathryn Stockett was a woman who saw how unfairly the black maids in her town were being treated. When the government and supposed leaders of the community were unwilling to do anything about the prejudice against the maids, Skeeter took responsibility. She wrote a book that exposed the problems and hypocrisyof the society. Her book produced a powerful reaction in her community as people read her book andrealized that she was talking about them. The black people in the town were also shaken by her book, and thanked her for willing to take responsibility and own up for the problems the community faced. Though SKeeter was just one girl, she took a stand against issues no else would stand against; the changed her small town forever.

Through the examples of Skeeter and Martin Luther, one can see that when individuals take responsibility for problems in their community, they can make a difference- even when others or the government cannot.



Again, I would be very thankful for any feedback! :)